Peer Review Feedback forms – EWS Digital Portfolio

Lit Review, Peer Review Feedback by Raymond Saldana

TASK ORIENTATION
Does the essay follow the task? How do you know this? [Look at the assignment itself and the guidelines given.]

-It is organized, cites credible sources and a strong thesis

STRUCTURE
Locate the thesis–and say it in your own words to be sure you understood it.
Now find the topic sentences. Does each topic sentences sum up or introduce its paragraph effectively?

– The thesis was easy to find and was supported throughout the paper

SUPPORT & ANALYSIS
Is evidence being used for any and all statements made? Does the author introduce, analyze, and explain the evidence? What’s the strongest piece of evidence?

– There are a lot of strong evidences that support each other

ORGANIZATION
Does the paper read smoothly? Are there parts that seem out of place or confusing? (Mark these. Give suggestions if possible.) Add any transitions that would make the organization smoother.

-Easy to follow along, has subheadings that keep the paper organized

CLARITY
Write what you consider:

– Thesis is clear, Very well written

PROOFREADING
Note here any suggested changes in wording, grammar, punctuation, or spelling:

– A couple of grammatical errors

OVERALL
What single change would make the most improvement in this essay?

-Make the conclusion longer

Research Paper Peer Review Feedback by Johanna Ramos:

TASK ORIENTATION
Does the essay follow the task? How do you know this? [Look at the assignment itself and the guidelines given.]

– Looking into objectification of women in society and how that has both a physical and mental effect.

STRUCTURE
Locate the thesis–and say it in your own words to be sure you understood it.
Now find the topic sentences. Does each topic sentences sum up or introduce its paragraph effectively?

– Has clear format that makes thesis visible.

SUPPORT & ANALYSIS
Is evidence being used for any and all statements made? Does the author introduce, analyze, and explain the evidence? What’s the strongest piece of evidence?

– Evidence is well picked and supports thesis strongly.

-Has a strong idea and what is being added into idea is clear.
– Adding how objectification is adding alcoholism in women which would be a physical
effect that is not being acknowledged.

CLARITY
Write what you consider:

– Ideas are clear
– Sentence are well written

PROOFREADING
Note here any suggested changes in wording, grammar, punctuation, or spelling:

– Well written.
– Punctuation is very organized

OVERALL
What single change would make the most improvement in this essay?

– Find a clear opposing side. Has a strong idea but opposing side is not very clear.
– Who disagrees or why is the alcoholism in women being ignored?

Research Presentation Feedback by Ihosephin Jimenez:

Presenter: Ziri

Topic: Health impact of objectifying women

Why did they choose it? She chose it because it’s an important topic and that’s what we see in the world.

Why does it matter to them? And the world? It matters because womens go through a lot of objectifying and it can create a lot of mental issues in them.

Interesting fact: Man’s foes through a lot of erection in the night when they are sleeping. Womens live with the constant fear of men and someone can do something they don’t want.

Opinion of presentation: It was good, she presented a google slide and everything was clear and detailed.

Research Presentation Feedback by Christian Xu:

Chigoziri

Health Impacts of Objectifying Women
The objectification of women leads to greater risk of STI and alcoholism
Alcoholism impacts women more heavily and healthwise than men which results in high rates of women risking sexual violence
Societal Norms influence the objectification of women, such as beauty standards, socioeconomic status and position
This topic was important to the presenter because the objectification of women leads to greater instances of discrimination, especially within the workforce, socioeconomically, mental illnesses, and their overall health